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Old 02-04-2007, 06:57 AM
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this song is inspired by that picture

I Has a Crayon
It's round and long,
and about this fact
I've written a song.
My smile is big,
my crayon is too;
now all my pretty pictures
are just the right hue.

Oh crayon, oh crayon,
you roll and you write.
You draw pretty pictures
all through the night.
Crayon, dear crayon
I do love you so;
Even more then
a really cheap hoe


I has a crayon,
pointy, it's true.
And with my dear crayon
I'll draw pictures for you.
My teeth are stark white
though my skin is not,
but you gotta admit
my crayon is hawt.

Oh crayon, oh crayon,
you roll and you write.
You draw pretty pictures
all through the night.
Crayon, dear crayon,
I do love you so;
even more then
a really cheap hoe.


I'm nearing the end
of my crayon serinade,
I'm sure that my crayon
will soon get me laid.
My crayon is a beaut,
it's soft and it's orange...
and with that I'm done with
this song and...uh...shit. kaloringe!

YAY!!

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The perfect poem for the perfect picture... *sniffle*

It makes me emotional...
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um...song, duh
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um...song, duh
*looks up* Shit... lyrics forum... still I thought I was in poetry.... WHAT HAVE I DONE?!?!?!??!?

*goes to slit wrist*

Oooh... a hamster...
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Old 02-04-2007, 07:02 AM
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go write a song about it, freak
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Stabby, that's so weird... but hilarious as well... don't ever post it as an actiual gon or ill have to put it on my mp3 player and dance around with it....
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A couple of things I picked up that don't quite fit the rhythm of the song, like, if it was sung you'd have to speed up to cram the words in,

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and with my dear crayon
ill draw a picture for you
Maybe "I'll draw something for you" would be better? Or "i'll draw pictures for you" perhaps?
And the sereande line... but I don't know how you'd change that and I think you can get away with it anyway, it's funny.

And at the end, if you said "orange and soft" then it might be easier to rhyme it, or something?

Well done, this made me giggle.
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Very nice rhyme scheme. Something tells me that last line wasn't all that intentional in the long-run ...

That's a big crayon btw ...

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ok, ill change the pictures line. And the ending with the orange bit was actually the only thing i had planned out when i started writing it, so there
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