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![]() this song is inspired by that picture I Has a Crayon It's round and long, and about this fact I've written a song. My smile is big, my crayon is too; now all my pretty pictures are just the right hue. Oh crayon, oh crayon, you roll and you write. You draw pretty pictures all through the night. Crayon, dear crayon I do love you so; Even more then a really cheap hoe I has a crayon, pointy, it's true. And with my dear crayon I'll draw pictures for you. My teeth are stark white though my skin is not, but you gotta admit my crayon is hawt. Oh crayon, oh crayon, you roll and you write. You draw pretty pictures all through the night. Crayon, dear crayon, I do love you so; even more then a really cheap hoe. I'm nearing the end of my crayon serinade, I'm sure that my crayon will soon get me laid. My crayon is a beaut, it's soft and it's orange... and with that I'm done with this song and...uh...shit. kaloringe! YAY!! Last edited by Pseudonym; 02-04-2007 at 09:01 PM. Reason: flownessishystuffuhyeah |
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The perfect poem for the perfect picture... *sniffle*
It makes me emotional... |
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um...song, duh
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*looks up* Shit... lyrics forum... still I thought I was in poetry.... WHAT HAVE I DONE?!?!?!??!?
*goes to slit wrist* Oooh... a hamster... |
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go write a song about it, freak
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Stabby, that's so weird... but hilarious as well... don't ever post it as an actiual gon or ill have to put it on my mp3 player and dance around with it....
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A couple of things I picked up that don't quite fit the rhythm of the song, like, if it was sung you'd have to speed up to cram the words in,
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And the sereande line... but I don't know how you'd change that and I think you can get away with it anyway, it's funny. And at the end, if you said "orange and soft" then it might be easier to rhyme it, or something? Well done, this made me giggle. ![]()
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I'm not really here any more folks, but may pop in once in a blue moon. Lover and out. |
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Very nice rhyme scheme. Something tells me that last line wasn't all that intentional in the long-run ...
![]() That's a big crayon btw ... ![]() gut demacht
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ok, ill change the pictures line. And the ending with the orange bit was actually the only thing i had planned out when i started writing it, so there
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#10
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EDITED!
check out the changes |
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