love junkie

[comic geek]

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[deadpunkgirl]

Its cool- very long but very cool. I really like it and yes it does sound more like lyrics. Keep up the good work!

[hologram heart]

woah that is fantastic, very raw, and yet poetic, lyrics. do you have an idea of what style this would be sung in?

[cathastings]

Comic geek, you are a flippin' fantastic writer. You could be world famous one day. But I have one question for you. I don't know if I should ask this, so please feel free not to answer, but how old are you, roughly. You can say something like between 13 and 15 or something if you want. But this is really good. :)

[Livinpink]

Yep, everyone on here could be World-Famous writers!!! Everyone is gud!!!

[kips]

*backs away nervous* Livi is officially insane, no offense ne1 i mean bout me.... *scared*

[Ichigo]

hey this is realy cool i can imagine it as a song easily good job

[camelsrule!!!]

hey thats really cool!!
kips ur better than me and u know it!!!

[comic geek]

thanx n in reply to cathastings im 15

[comic geek]

abe tom used my lyrics!!! what a cock !! grrrrr thanx 4 askin me first his excuse was i didnt mind b4 well i have news 4 u i do now i only didnt mind b4 cos u wernt boning chazzer

[rubber monocle]

Is this song based on "the decline" by NOFX?
I see lots of similarities

[comic geek]

wats the decline?

[comic geek]

ok ive found the lyrics for "the decline" and no it isnt based on it to be honest id never even heard of it!!!!! it was about my friend who lost his girlfriend of 6 years due to drug abuse

[whatsername4490]

lv it pk, gud work! :D

[thaOneANonly_LilELMO]

Awesome Cutie Keep Writing!

[comic geek]

thanx :) :)

[comic geek]

thanx ....so A7X fan????

[electroboy]

i really really like this it tells a story n it sort of sounds like lyrics love it

[Pseudonym]

parts of this were absolutely amazing... the lines "i was the bullet you were the gun
pull the trigger and watch them run" is...perfect.

and "you made me feel so special
you made me feel like shit
my heart an opened wound
and you the salt in it" was good

however, im not gonna be one of those ppl that post just to say how awesome something is. I actually try to help you become a better writer, like it or not. I see a lot of room for improvement here. Many rhymes, especialyl in the beginning, seem forced. Also, there are random lines that are longer then most, and it upsets the flow. So, work on that. Improve. You've certainly got potential ;)


PS- Is it ok if i steal one of your lines for an MSN screen name? and yes, thats a compliment

[Tails]

as always i liked it alot!

[comic geek]

thanks both of you will try and improve on it :)