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Holden Blake
04-18-2006, 02:21 PM
A young woman arrived home with a relaxed smile on her face having just experienced a particularly fulfilling day at work. Still in her blue nurse overalls, she quickly slipped off her shoes before sinking onto the soft material of her bed with a thankful sigh. Working in the medical profession certainly had its stressful moments but days like today seemed to make it all worth while. She picked up the little card the child had made her and fingered the artwork with glee. Upon opening it she found inscribed on
the inside in green crayon, 'To Nurse Holly, thank you for looking after me and being so kind.' Below this there was a picture of a smiley face and a big red heart and beneath this was written, 'lots and lots of love Hannah xxxxxxx' No doubt the five year old had been given some help with her spelling but the words were quite obliviously the child's own. She closed the card over again and kissed the front before pinning it up with the others on her dresser. Then, as though on cue, the evening sun began to poke its way through the spaces in the window blinds casting a series of bright rays across the small room. She soon felt the warm beams hitting upon her shoulder and in that precise moment, Holly Cassidy felt at ease with the world. A strong and exciting sense of spiritual awareness seemed to grasp hold of her as she reflected on the recovery of that little girl named Hannah. She had been one of Holly's first ever patients brought in at just three years old in a dire condition after....

Scooter
04-18-2006, 03:33 PM
Really good and descriptive. I like it. Is it finished? If not, please continue.

RhiannoN
04-18-2006, 05:32 PM
no fair, you can't stop there. I need closure....lol

Ivy
04-19-2006, 06:48 PM
Lol, i absolutley agree with everyones indiganation at u ending just there, butits a really good beginning...

Kcpackers
04-19-2006, 06:58 PM
continue!
cmon cmon cmon.
dont leave us hanging.
great descriptions.
seems kind of run-on-ish at parts, but that could just be me. sentence structure too, but this is all grammatical anyway.

Holden Blake
04-19-2006, 10:57 PM
Nah I'm kinda working on something else at the moment, but if you like I can get back to it a.s.a.p. Or perhaps one of you guys would like to adopt it, that would be fine also as I'm a bit preoccupied at the moment with my novel. It could be kinda like a 'complete the fiction' story where everyone contributes and there are multiple authors that can pull it in a different directions just to see what we come up with. Wot do you think? All your reviews are greatly appreaciated, thanks a lot,
Holden Blake

Kcpackers
04-20-2006, 12:29 AM
okay, you finish your book, and get back to this whenever you feel like it
the many author deal sounds cool but id like to read it from your point, although that would be pretty cool.
didnt mean to make you pressured, sry bout that.

Holden Blake
04-20-2006, 12:34 AM
don't worry about it I'm just sorry I don't have the time to continue, but I'm not quite sure wot you mean by 'id like to read it from your point'??

Kcpackers
04-20-2006, 01:52 AM
id like to read your style of writing.

Holden Blake
04-20-2006, 10:44 AM
O.k sure I'll post some of my novel up soon

Holden Blake
04-21-2006, 12:11 PM
Hey chavi, welcome to teenage writers!
Thanks for your comments about this work