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kips
02-25-2006, 01:43 AM
Chapter One
Begin

Someone once told me that you can't exist without affecting everyone in the world. I never udnerstood that, and Istill don't. But I think I have an idea what they meant and I could be wrong or I could be right, but all that matters right now is that i tell you what happened. Im telling you in case it happens again. You should be waiting. Don't ask what for, just be prepared. Because there will be another me. Another Unguarded will return and tha will be your second chance. Your last chance. So be prepared and listen. If you do nothing else, then just listen. Because even without you knowing, I have affected you.

I will start, as a lot of stories do, at the beginning, although the beginning is unclear. I will begin where I did becasue this is the story of me, The First Unguarded. So I will begin on the seventh of June 1977, in a small apartment just off the coast of Essex to a recently bereaved mother named Susanne Johnson. She had no family to speak of, apart from a deranged mother in an old persons home somewhere in Wales. The night I was born it rained heavilly, which my mum always used to tell me. She used to say it was like a homage and that I was her blessing. Not that she was religious or anything, quite the opposite, she was strongly athiest and I don't know what impact that had on me. Although it must have had some because everyone affects everyone else, even when they don't want to. It's our curse I suppose, that amoung other things.

I grew up in the secluded area with my mother, who seemed hell-bent on raising me "well". But she juggled a job as well and so I was often left by myself once I reached about seven. I went to the local school and the children there hated me. They never said it but I knew. I know now that you hate me, for instance. You hate me for the one thing that I cannot change. i am unguarded and you hate that. But I should carry on with what I was saying, there isn't much time but, since I would appear to be insane, that means nothing to me. It's funny, if only they knew how much time means to me. I udnerstand it a lot better than they, I just choose to use it differently.

My mother at times would seem so determined to make me hapy that when I wasn't she refused to believe it was real. In that sense, I began to wonder if there was such a thing as living. It's funny, I may be crazy but by the age of ten I was already searching beyond human emotion. I became a despondant child, I would frequently drift into a subconscious daydream and my teachers became afraid, often angry. The other children stayed away from me, they didn't want me to play with them, and I didn't want to play. I began to think at around this time, that I had to escape quickly, not play games but live how life was. It was not beautiful or ugly, hateful or loving, it simpley was. The final word of life was still hidden, yet I had complete faith that I would one day find it out.

Is this radical thinking for a ten year old Essex boy? Perhaps.... or maybe it is a product of a deranged mind. Well, that's unimporant, so perhaps we should carry on with the story. That way, you can emerse yourself in "real life" rather than what is true. That would be too much for you...

Okay, people tell me what you think so far!

thecritic
02-25-2006, 12:48 PM
Very interesting... Please continue.

Olive
02-25-2006, 12:50 PM
Kips, I like it! I think it is a good start to a story (and i really want to read the rest of it now). But there is a few spelling and punctuation mistakes. Overall though i think it is great! (oh and I got Ally to read it and she loves it!)

kips
02-25-2006, 12:52 PM
:P why tank oo!!! Yes, it was one in the mornin and spellin isnt my high point anyway! Its weird how I can feel like I actually AM a ten year old Essex boy. Ahem, just to clear up any mistakes, I am not by the way!!! anyway, bit hyper, bu the rest will be cumin soon...
*turns sky blue* oh bloody brill...

camelsrule!!!
02-25-2006, 03:58 PM
kips thia is really good plz continue!!!!!

kips
02-25-2006, 05:31 PM
Well im kinda busy at the mo but im thinkin... i know what will happen i just need to get there.... :P

camelsrule!!!
02-26-2006, 01:46 PM
the suspence is killing me!!!

kips
02-26-2006, 01:50 PM
oh no, emma come back, dont die!!!!!

camelsrule!!!
02-26-2006, 01:51 PM
its ok i just like the saying its just im bored and i want you to move your bum and write it!!!!!!!!!!

kips
02-26-2006, 02:08 PM
well ive got two main ones on the go right now and this is only one of them... :P i dont wanna post summat and then mess up the story because i didnt do the second part properly!

totz
02-27-2006, 10:37 AM
wow i love the way youve written it in a kinda speaking way and it must be good becoz i have little pics and sounds whirling in my head!!!! its a good idea so dont lose it keep thinking 4 eva think!!!

kips
02-27-2006, 01:16 PM
why thanks! What sorts of pictures and sounds?!? Im still thinkin, i have got bout 3 main stories on the gbo rite now tho... :P

Vera Bell
02-27-2006, 07:57 PM
I love it too. Please continue? I know you've got 3 other stories, but I just want to know how it's going to continue..

kips
02-27-2006, 08:00 PM
Tee hee, yeh well just wait a while, coz utherwise itll b shityy when i post a half-assed attempt!!!

Bobsey
02-27-2006, 09:14 PM
i liked it. it was long and i acheived reading it! i am proud of myself! and me want more! i like it, its intreging me.
MORE!!!!!

blondiE
02-27-2006, 11:29 PM
yes, very intreging!
lol plz continue wen ur not too busy. its nice- good work

cathastings
02-28-2006, 07:38 PM
Kipsy (soz, I love that name, kipsy), I love this! It's so good hunny, and I can't wait for part 2! :D

kips
03-02-2006, 07:20 PM
oh, wow, thank you ppl!

Imelda
08-31-2009, 08:25 PM
Kips left more than a year ago, guys ... watch the date.